Sometimes your dialogue feels a little bit rushed, like you are trying to get all of the plot points out at once rather than havign a back and forth.
Depressed Loki seems very in character, persuasive even when dismal. And I loved his comment about Tahiti.
I like how you did the Peggy scene that they did for Captain America II, but you did it in a very different way.
Why is Clint turning to Darcy for advice on what to do with Loki? It is not a poor choice, I am just curious abotu why he picked her.
I love the idea of Skye being able to meet Loki. The girl is incredibly empathic so it is a nice contrast to him. Also I like the idea of Skye being friends with Darcy.
Jane's thoughts about the dress seem to suit her a lot. Jane and Bruce laughing at nerd jokes makes me smile.
You handle the perspective shifts very well.
Go Clint and Tony taking on the douchebag!
Cassie and Kate fangirling over Agatha Christie made me smile.
The most awkward of strip club meetings amuses me more than it probably should have.
Their reasonings on science makes a lot of sense.
Darcy is a wonderful little gossip.
I like you playing upon Loki and his children. People often overlook that aspect of him. Also Loki with a puppy is just too adorable!
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Date: 2014-11-04 09:47 pm (UTC)Depressed Loki seems very in character, persuasive even when dismal. And I loved his comment about Tahiti.
I like how you did the Peggy scene that they did for Captain America II, but you did it in a very different way.
Why is Clint turning to Darcy for advice on what to do with Loki? It is not a poor choice, I am just curious abotu why he picked her.
I love the idea of Skye being able to meet Loki. The girl is incredibly empathic so it is a nice contrast to him. Also I like the idea of Skye being friends with Darcy.
Jane's thoughts about the dress seem to suit her a lot. Jane and Bruce laughing at nerd jokes makes me smile.
You handle the perspective shifts very well.
Go Clint and Tony taking on the douchebag!
Cassie and Kate fangirling over Agatha Christie made me smile.
The most awkward of strip club meetings amuses me more than it probably should have.
Their reasonings on science makes a lot of sense.
Darcy is a wonderful little gossip.
I like you playing upon Loki and his children. People often overlook that aspect of him. Also Loki with a puppy is just too adorable!